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“Oh God”, she muttered turning over in bed.

“Ketan… Wake up”, she whispered, scrabbling blanket to reach him. “Maaaammaaa…There’s someone under my bed”, she said with trepidation.

Nocturnal Treasure Hunt

Dark night was perfect background for ghostly thoughts. A casual glance at the window, through which escaped faint street light, sent chill down her spine as the dancing shadows of the bare tree outside, shaped the shifting spectral images.

“Shaila”, said a smothered voice.

She was about to faint when it fell on her ear.

“Rrrrram, rrraaaammmm…rrrrrr” she blabbered with her eyes closed. Her voice reached crescendo as she sensed fresh jerks.

Sudden frantic knock on door made her spirit jump out of her mouth and chanting deserted her. Laconism was punctuated by lack of movement under the bed as well as knocking.

Silence was short lived as a dreadful wail escaped her lips when she felt a hand on her leg, triggering frantic knocking on the door.

“Shaila, it’s me Ketan”

Shaila looked in disbelief as Ketan appeared from under. He turned the lights on and opened the door.

Rushing in little perplexed, Naveen, their son, stood next to Shaila who was sweating and fuming with anger.

“My bad. Was searching for wedding ring that had slipped my finger this afternoon. Didn’t wish to disturb everyone’s peace of mind by informing”, said Ketan ruefully sounding politically correct.

“What on Earth?”, expressed Shaila.

Naveen walked away, nodding in rejection.

Ketan slipped under blanket aborting nocturnal treasure hunt to avoid impending World War!


Linking this post to #TellTaleThursday by Anshu & Priya
Word Count: 250
Categories: FictionShort Story

19 Comments

Abhijit Ray · January 30, 2019 at 8:52 am

Ketan would be in trouble if found that he lost the ring. He might as well make an effort to locate. He is in trouble either way.

    Anagha Yatin · January 30, 2019 at 9:11 am

    Double whammy for Ketan. Thanks Abhijit ji for visiting.

geekanika · January 30, 2019 at 9:15 am

wow you are amazing at creating atmosphere! poor Ketan. Doomed if you ask me.

    Anagha Yatin · January 30, 2019 at 10:18 am

    Ya… he cant avoid his fate even if he pulls over the blanket.
    Thanks Kanika.

Jyotirmoy Sarkar · January 30, 2019 at 10:48 am

Poor Ketan, the issue is really delicate and i think he chose the right way.
Very nicely created the atmosphere.

    Anagha Yatin · January 30, 2019 at 1:51 pm

    True that Jyotirmoy. Thanks for visiting.

Anshu Bhojnagarwala · January 30, 2019 at 1:12 pm

Ketan would be in trouble any which way – not a good night for him. First he lost the wedding ring and then scared his wife. Ooh la la!

    Anagha Yatin · January 30, 2019 at 1:52 pm

    Yes Anshu, in all practical ways, Ketan is going to face the nightmare even in day time for days to follow!
    Thanks for visiting

Shilpa Nairy · January 30, 2019 at 3:37 pm

I always admire your narration style. Lovely Anagha. Hope Ketan would have peaceful sleep 🙂

    Anagha Yatin · January 30, 2019 at 4:18 pm

    In most likely hood, he wont 😉
    Thanks Shilpa

Priya · January 30, 2019 at 4:19 pm

Loved it, Anagha.
What a write up! You always amaze me.😊

    Anagha Yatin · January 30, 2019 at 4:22 pm

    Thanks Priya

Sajid Akhter · January 30, 2019 at 9:59 pm

Ketan is in real trouble. God help him. Thank you for creating this engaging and lovely post.

Have a good day.

    Anagha Yatin · January 30, 2019 at 10:31 pm

    Thanks Sajid.

Kalpana Solsi · January 30, 2019 at 11:19 pm

What a climax. it is a double trouble for Ketan . losing the ring and scaring his wife.

https://ideasolsi65.blogspot.com/2019/01/the-wigwam.html

Rrohan Kachalia (@rohank01) · January 31, 2019 at 5:03 pm

Been there…. faced the music for days. The only difference is that this post is a bit scary. So, well done, Anagha for creating the atmosphere.

    Anagha Yatin · January 31, 2019 at 5:14 pm

    Was I spying on ur life Rohan 😁
    Thanks for visiting and sharing slice of your treasure hunt story!

Ramya Abhinand · February 1, 2019 at 11:43 am

Ah Ketan sure is in trouble . Double whammy indeed. Well written Anagha!

    Anagha Yatin · February 1, 2019 at 3:14 pm

    Thanks Ramya. Good to see you here.

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